Date: 27 Feb 2009 - 04:13 pm Title: Part 2 - Lessons learned
Hmmm. Interesting. A little surprising that "Donna's" little birth defect didn't get found out during the week... But, people see what they expect.
I think the story could have been more impactful, or immediate with more dialog... but it would have been much longer then.
That Dad comforted mom while child sleeping was interesting.
Date: 11 Jan 2009 - 12:56 pm Title: Part 2 - Lessons learned
Cute story but not much depth. I wlll take it as is , but would be nice to deal with the real issues that are going to become huge soon. Showing by telling in terms of many details, strong emotions, and painfull crisis could be more memorable and allow us to attach to the characters in a greater way. Am really enjoying this though, don't get me wrong.