Signed · 19 Mar 2013 - 08:20 pm · Chapter 1 [Report This]
Marvelous tale told well! did find a 'me' where a 'my' should be, and a 'me' that got missed in editing, so I'd suggest more proofreading; but it wasn't enough to detract from your talent much. My honest opinion is that this is a much longer and detailed story that has had its summary posted. You've got skill...show us all what'chya got girlfriend.
Signed · 02 Jan 2013 - 12:47 pm · Chapter 1 [Report This]
Signed · 31 Aug 2012 - 05:11 pm · Chapter 1 [Report This]
An ok story. Does need more chapters this isn't enough not by a long shot. The dress for the sister & the curves so much more to cover.
Signed · 31 Aug 2012 - 05:18 am · Chapter 1 [Report This]
Realy enjoyed this story. Good advice too!
