thruholewizard
not even a decent discription of the unicorns , what color are, thy how big ,do they walk or prance???
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not even a decent discription of the unicorns , what color are, thy how big ,do they walk or prance???
Still being crypticly vague ,it needs lots more description
nice start but why all the mystery ? Any ways was hoping for better discription of all involved
Well It's almost perfict Ashly I see thing I could have said diffrently but defently a great story :) glad to help out & ty for letting me.
Im currently in the middle of writting the next chapter, I kinda lost my muse for this story but shes slowly comin g back to me :) I'm hoping to get this done soon :) Thank you guys for liking it :)
Aashly,i have just finished reading allthis stories chapters i think it is agreat story,and am looking forward
to more chapters in the not so distant future
Hugs Roo
I hope you are able to provide more on this yarn. It has me intrigued so far.
Doning Great hun you & Zoe make a great pair :). I have a filling this is sort of like Becoming Robin & Aria Balde but in a diffrent setting & Things are defently diffrent but yeat similer (I really can't explain it tough its simmiler but diffrent) I wonder what was in that sack that was given to Mizule by the isterious stranger noting good I suspect.
I look fowardto the next chapter hun great work keep it up hun :)
Hun Great start I liked it when you cowrote with Zoe on BC/TS on "Boys don't cry"
Keep up the good work
Interesting beginning to a story. Looking forward to the rest.
Erm okay, you need to explain here how James became Arura. There is a gap between chapter 1 and this one. Was James an elf to begin with and only dreamed he was a human, or is hs dreaming now that heis a female el named Arura? This is a strange two chapters.
Very cute
Thank you for sharing these
Very good start. You left the story many ways to proceed.
Thank you, Ill make sure the next chapter is longer, and Ill use a wp instead of google docs :)
I meant for this chapter to be alittle short, it was more of a teaser and a test to see if I could do it
This is a cute story, but this chapter could have been longer. There are also a few grammar errors and misspeallings. You need to review this story and use a dictionary if you have to. There are famous authors that use the dictionary to make sure a word is spelled properly.