TGFiction COTTAGEPUNK
Stories that take root by day and glow after dark.
Hmmm. Interesting. A little surprising that "Donna's" little birth defect didn't get found out during the week... But, people see what they expect.
I think the story could have been more impactful, or immediate with more dialog... but it would have been much longer then.
That Dad comforted mom while child sleeping was interesting.
Thanks,
Annette
Intresting story. It's really too bad that the two girls were not willing to REALLY remain friends with Dennis once Donna was gone... Seems they are not as open minded as they might think. Are Dennis and Donna different people? Once Dennis learned his lessons, did he remain a prankster as Dennis? It didn't SOUND like it... So why the reaction - other than cultural brainwashing.
Cute story but not much depth. I wlll take it as is , but would be nice to deal with the real issues that are going to become huge soon. Showing by telling in terms of many details, strong emotions, and painfull crisis could be more memorable and allow us to attach to the characters in a greater way. Am really enjoying this though, don't get me wrong.
Hugs, Kristi
I was enjoying this story, till it got to mom unilaterally deciding that he had to remain a girl after his punishment was completed.
<< His mum turned to him and smiled, "Yes I'm so proud of the way you've behaved, your school report was your best ever. So if you think I'm going to let mischievous Dennis start next term in place of my diligent daughter Donna think again. I was putting your education first when I agreed to the headmaster's condition and I'm going to do it again now. Besides you would lose Becky & Jo as best friends." >>
This was totally unfair, even though it worked out well. Dennis had completed his punishment and mom admitted she was proud of him, yet he was given no chance to prove he had learned his lesson. What was mom's plan if he had truly hated it and felt completely betrayed, as he had every right to feel. Sorry, but I lost all respect for mom at this point. Mom should have given him a chance; my guess is he would have come around to what mom wanted on his own.
verry good ilike it something new and it was verry good and i wood love to see more storys like this it is deft than a lot of the others we need more frash storys more like this
have a good one love n hugs awalys
That was so sweet, I almost started to cry. I bet most TGs feel the same way. "Why couldn't I have such a loving and understanding family?"
Hugs'
Renee
A sweet story, Cat. Sure would be nice to see some more about Donna when you have the time.
KJT
